Two Kids…

One day there was 2 kids, Jake and Casidy. They were best friends intill when there parents found out that they were dating soon. They would not let eachother but they sneck out and play around at the park. While one day they were at the park, 2 guys in black masks kidnapped them. They were only 15. When they woke up. Jake was tied to a pole and Casidy was held up in a closet. Jake was a master at karate so he soon got out of the rope and saved Casidy. Casidy didn’t talk. Jake started to freak out, so he felt her wrist and there was no feeling. Casidy got chocked to death and couldent get saved. Jake started crying. He was mad at his parents, he was angry at his life! One of the kidnappers woke up and shot Jake in the back of his neck. When Jake was still alive, he grabbed Casidys head and kissed her lightly. Her eyes slowly opened. Then the other kidnapper shot her between her eyes. “NO!” Jake cried. Then he shot him again. Then the cops found the parents and and the parents told them that its there fault of not letting them date. They cried and cried. Then 4 years later, the same thing happened again with Emily and Michael.

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  1. This story is all over the place, and the grammar is absolutely horrendous. Take more time telling the story, and use a writing program that allows you to perform spell and grammar checks, and you’ll be well on your way to good writing : )

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